This is a well composed piece. The flow is spot on and lulls the reader
into that happy place. You capture the secret and softness of the 'lovers' in such a comforting way. There are quite a few 'super star' lines. "Your moth-like breath crowds my ear" "Flushed orange carpel lips" "honeyed perspiration of leaves" "an infantile sleep under the womblike foliage" All examples of fine illiteration. All in all this is a stunning piece of writing. It makes you want to read it over and over! A very well put together, poignant, and pleasant piece to read. Excellent work!